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Re: Familiar, Chapter 1.

Posted: Fri Mar 10, 2023 11:29 am
by felfan3000
Thanks Fel!

Re: Familiar, Chapter 1.

Posted: Sun Mar 12, 2023 10:56 pm
by baengi
that typo made my 13 y.o. inner child laugh:

[...] where he worked as a pubic works official. The Baron’s job was to organize [...]

Re: Familiar, Chapter 1.

Posted: Mon Mar 13, 2023 3:24 pm
by Andygal
this is a really interesting premise, and I'd be interested if you wanted to continue it.

My only quibble is that some of the exposition feels a bit redundant and could probably be tightened up.

Re: Familiar, Chapter 1.

Posted: Mon Mar 13, 2023 11:27 pm
by CRYUnicornClear
The Chess rules were hard to get thru and would possibly be better used as a flashback in a latter chapter if its necessary for later story. As always you make world building interesting and impossible to stop reading. I am now curious to know the twists and turns you have set up. Looking forward to any new chapter in any story.

Re: Familiar, Chapter 1.

Posted: Tue Mar 14, 2023 6:20 pm
by thrystan
I definitely want to read more of this.

Re: Familiar, Chapter 1.

Posted: Wed Mar 15, 2023 5:52 pm
by Ping
To put it eloquently: Moar, please

And yes, I more or less skipped the chess part.

Re: Familiar, Chapter 1.

Posted: Thu Mar 16, 2023 3:55 am
by trodrian
Thanks, FEL

Re: Familiar, Chapter 1.

Posted: Sat Mar 18, 2023 2:24 pm
by Blacktiger
An awesome story! I was at first a bit sceptical but then the story really took off for me! You really have a great talent at building worlds, Fel. You should be proud of that :mrgreen: