Nightmare Machine (revised)

ANTIcarrot · Post by **ANTIcarrot** » Wed Feb 23, 2011 6:40 pm

This is a horror story, and one of my older short-stories, which I recently had a look at and decided to update. Posting it here in hopes of some feedback as to what works and what doesn't.

This particular story contains some violence.
[story tags: mature / horror / violence / might make you think ]

dellstart · Post by **dellstart** » Wed Feb 23, 2011 10:10 pm

woah anti didn't know you were into "furries", somehow that's not how I pictured ya. couldn't find the link though.

ANTIcarrot · Post by **ANTIcarrot** » Wed Feb 23, 2011 11:26 pm

dellstart wrote:woah anti didn't know you were into "furries", somehow that's not how I pictured ya.

I have absolutely no idea how to answer that.

couldn't find the link though.

... It's the one marked [ Download ] to the left of the ultraviolet picture of the sun, in the box immediately below it.

Though now I'm back home I've uploaded it for simplicity's sake.

dellstart · Post by **dellstart** » Thu Feb 24, 2011 3:41 am

ANTIcarrot wrote:
dellstart wrote:woah anti didn't know you were into "furries", somehow that's not how I pictured ya.
I have absolutely no idea how to answer that.

couldn't find the link though.
... It's the one marked [ Download ] to the left of the ultraviolet picture of the sun, in the box immediately below it.

Though now I'm back home I've uploaded it for simplicity's sake.

Thanks for that .

I think you are misunderstanding my comment. It wasn't meant as a diss or slag against that particular genre, it was more of a pleasant surprise.From the way, or what you've written in the forums over the years, it wouldn't be something ,i would have thought would be your go. Happy to be proven wrong.
As a full time otaku and avid manga/comic book reader ,I can say that i have read my fair share as well.

garion · Post by **garion** » Thu Feb 24, 2011 3:51 am

wasn't bad at all anti and you made your point eloquently.

For a twist on that theme I would suggest the latest arc of Gantz but beware its not for the squeamish or faint hearted.There is another manga , which deals with a genetically produced chicken who develops a human like intelligence .forget its name though.

ANTIcarrot · Post by **ANTIcarrot** » Sun Mar 06, 2011 12:29 pm

10+ days, 100+ downloads, 2 cases of feedback. Hmm. <makes notes for future...>

lagomilo · Post by **lagomilo** » Sun Mar 06, 2011 1:07 pm

Hello,
Well written story but boy is this Dark. Your main character has a serious righteous attitude. All together I liked it. Now for the whining part. It was to short of a short story. Needs a little more objective background I feel on the world is in the state that it is in. Maybe a little more on the aliens.

Well this is short but my two cents. Thank you for your time,

Lago

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