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The Aurora Project, Ch. 2 **SPOILERS!**
Posted: Mon Jan 10, 2011 2:26 am
by Fiferguy
Yay for more chapters.
Re: The Aurora Project, Ch. 2 **SPOILERS!**
Posted: Tue Jan 11, 2011 11:37 pm
by Greymist
Don't suppose I can bug you to change these lines could I?
"and the few things he’d managed to accumulate over the last six years were few" - the double few.
"and as Jonathan got closer to it he realized that it wasn’t just painted black, it was absorbing all the light around it as well" - Shouldn't that be Ethan?
Re: The Aurora Project, Ch. 2 **SPOILERS!**
Posted: Wed Jan 12, 2011 12:02 am
by Fiferguy
Greymist wrote:Don't suppose I can bug you to change these lines could I?
"and the few things he’d managed to accumulate over the last six years were few" - the double few.
"and as Jonathan got closer to it he realized that it wasn’t just painted black, it was absorbing all the light around it as well" - Shouldn't that be Ethan?
Oops... can you tell that I proofed this while I was sleepy?