Familiar, Chapter 1.

[felfan3000]

Thanks Fel!

[baengi]

that typo made my 13 y.o. inner child laugh:

[...] where he worked as a pubic works official. The Baron’s job was to organize [...]

[Andygal]

this is a really interesting premise, and I'd be interested if you wanted to continue it.

My only quibble is that some of the exposition feels a bit redundant and could probably be tightened up.

[CRYUnicornClear]

The Chess rules were hard to get thru and would possibly be better used as a flashback in a latter chapter if its necessary for later story. As always you make world building interesting and impossible to stop reading. I am now curious to know the twists and turns you have set up. Looking forward to any new chapter in any story.

[thrystan]

I definitely want to read more of this.

[Ping]

To put it eloquently: Moar, please

And yes, I more or less skipped the chess part.

[trodrian]

Thanks, FEL

[Blacktiger]

An awesome story! I was at first a bit sceptical but then the story really took off for me! You really have a great talent at building worlds, Fel. You should be proud of that