Shifters, test chapter.

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Shifters, test chapter.

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This is it, the test chapter I wrote for Shifters.

Constructive criticism welcome. Negative criticism...I know where you live. Remember that.

Enjoy.
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Thanks Fel
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Thanks Fel

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Nice a second dose of fell tonight.
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No fair Fel

Write more now!!!

No wait

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Don't stop adding to Earth Bond
Stop sleeping and write!!

Teaser is right!
This could go so many ways.

Thanks a million for all your efforts.

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Hi,
very very good first chapter. Please pretty please more :D

As usual great job. Just as a curiosity, I live something like 70 km south of a guarda :)

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zedd wrote:Hi,
very very good first chapter. Please pretty please more :D

As usual great job. Just as a curiosity, I live something like 70 km south of a guarda :)

Regards
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You Sir are an evil, evil person! Now the wait is on for more. Pretty exciting introduction to the story.
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THanks, for the posting, just wondering when we start the endless and madening arguments, we should do it in the other stories section right, just checking.
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Constructive criticism.

A bit short. Too short to figure out why Rafael and the pieces of tid bits with the necklace. Too short. Not long nough. Should have stop at least to say who Rafael is and why the shifters are after the necklace. That his father is one of them?? killed by the shifters, betrayed by the shifters cause he a jinnnn.. hmm. Not ehough juice. But good writing. Good start of a plot.
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Very intriguing, would like to see more. :?

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Excited for more of this. I have little idea where you are taking it, but if you pull in the occult into this... Man, could be your most intense work yet. Love it, thanks fel.
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Awesome story. Can't wait to see where you go with it.
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Certainly an interesting start, thanks for the early Christmas present.
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Once again you cause a person to contemplate something other than our normal everyday life. Thank you. I look forward to seeing your expansion from this beginning.

Appreciate your good work Fel.
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