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Shadow Walker, chapter 5.
Re: Shadow Walker, chapter 5.
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Re: Shadow Walker, chapter 5.
Yet another great chapter, Fel. Keep them coming.
An objective definition of "Political Correctness":
"A doctrine fostered by a delusional, illogical, liberal minority, and
rabidly promoted by an unscrupulous mainstream media, which holds forth the
proposition that it is entirely possible to pick up a turd by the clean end."
"A doctrine fostered by a delusional, illogical, liberal minority, and
rabidly promoted by an unscrupulous mainstream media, which holds forth the
proposition that it is entirely possible to pick up a turd by the clean end."
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you made my day m8
great, thanks
ham
great, thanks
ham
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Great chapter Fel, Thank you.
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Thanks Fel! It has been hard waiting for this.
crxbnt
crxbnt
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Thanks Fel!
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Hey thanks for the new chapter Fel... much appreciated.
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You always have a new chapter when i need it most. Thank you.
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Looking forward to the next chapter. I really enjoy your writing.
Mocha
Mocha
"Ethics is doing the right thing when no one is watching, even though it's not in your best interest"
--- David Reed
--- David Reed
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Great part, but I found a TINY error.
The sergeant was as effective with his pain stick as he was sadistic. It took a cruel, twisted man to train and practice to bring a man to the brink of passing out with a pain stick over and over, inflicting unspeakable agony, and not either be horrified by it or enjoy it. This man was the kind that enjoyed it. For how long, Kyven had no idea, he was repeatably tormented with a device whose soul function was to make someone feel like they had been cast into Hell.
did you see it? The error is the word "soul." In this case, I believe the word you wanted to use is "sole."
On a slightly off topic question, do you use the microphone to dictate the story or do you type it out?
Keep up the amazing work, you have no idea how pleased I was to see two parts out this week!
The sergeant was as effective with his pain stick as he was sadistic. It took a cruel, twisted man to train and practice to bring a man to the brink of passing out with a pain stick over and over, inflicting unspeakable agony, and not either be horrified by it or enjoy it. This man was the kind that enjoyed it. For how long, Kyven had no idea, he was repeatably tormented with a device whose soul function was to make someone feel like they had been cast into Hell.
did you see it? The error is the word "soul." In this case, I believe the word you wanted to use is "sole."
On a slightly off topic question, do you use the microphone to dictate the story or do you type it out?
Keep up the amazing work, you have no idea how pleased I was to see two parts out this week!
I'd gladly travel back in time, except I would have to wait longer for the next chapter of Fel's work...sorry, pass.