Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

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Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by GBLW » Tue Mar 13, 2012 3:00 am

He's BAAAAaaaaack! Tor, that is.

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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by konman » Tue Mar 13, 2012 3:57 am

Thank's a lot for another great chapter.

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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by Dreamer » Tue Mar 13, 2012 4:06 am

Thanks for the update. Good story so far, I like the gradual way in which you are introducing new characters and thereby complicating/altering the plot line. Keep up the good work.

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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by gesit » Tue Mar 13, 2012 5:33 am

thanks m8

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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by crxbnt » Tue Mar 13, 2012 12:25 pm

Thanks for another chapter! Still needing regular fixes to keep going.

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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by Delvfar » Tue Mar 13, 2012 9:17 pm

Thanks for the new Chapter!

Can't wait to see whats in the basement or is that the donjone! :)
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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by Greymist » Tue Mar 13, 2012 10:43 pm

Thanks for the chapter, and nice play to have an ending, makes me want to read more.

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Post by expedient » Tue Mar 13, 2012 10:59 pm

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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by ThisAndThat1 » Wed Mar 14, 2012 11:31 pm

For several seconds no one moved or spoke, instead they all gaped at the open hole in the beautifully finished and highly polished wooden floor.

You can not stop there.
The next update will be forever down the road.
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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by stevenp07 » Thu May 10, 2012 11:07 pm

I waited all April and now it's May, Please, another chapter! You left it with a huge cliff hanger!!

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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by GBLW » Fri May 11, 2012 2:36 am

Sorry, but it's Hockey playoff season. I've been watching the NHL playoffs, the WHL playoffs and the IIHF playoffs.

(Hey, I'm Canadian, and for me, hockey is THE sport of sports!) :wink:
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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by gesit » Fri May 11, 2012 6:43 am

enjoy your hockey m8,
life is short enough!!
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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by alkiera » Mon May 14, 2012 3:19 am

I just re-read the Alpha story and started reading this. It's really quite good!

There is one hilarious typo in Chapter 11 though... when the sapper group comes in to take care of the explosives, he refers to them as a 'discovered IUD'. An IUD is a contraceptive (Intra-Uterine) Device; I believe you were looking for IED, which is Improvised Explosive Device.

Although, given fundamentalist Islam's general level of respect for women and opinions of birth control, a plot involving explosive IUDs wouldn't really surprise me.

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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by GBLW » Mon May 14, 2012 3:29 am

alkiera wrote:There is one hilarious typo in Chapter 11 though... when the sapper group comes in to take care of the explosives, he refers to them as a 'discovered IUD'. An IUD is a contraceptive (Intra-Uterine) Device; I believe you were looking for IED, which is Improvised Explosive Device.
Okay, I admit that the typo is my fault to start with, but am I ever going to tease my editor about that one. In fact I doubt if I'll ever let her live it down - she was a teacher and as well as English, she taught classes on 'safe sex' to hundreds of kids over the last few decades. :roll:
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Re: Thor's Child - complete to Chapter 22

Post by khyranleander » Mon May 14, 2012 7:08 pm

That's kind of like in a story I did some editing for. The main character was a spy, and one chapter the writer sent me had the guy dropping into a "connivance" store before going on a mission. Such an appropriate and funny spelling error! I could see the dialogue: Yes, I'd like the deal on dirty deeds, the prime cut of triple cross, and gimme' a handful of white lies to go!

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